On the Beach

by Twiren

6121 yr136(2.2 avg)
ADillustration

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Mondechrome· Oct 1st

The beginning is rather confusing and feels unnecessary, but I think the sex itself is intriguing. I need more lesbian stuff posted here as I am one. It’s like finding a four leaf clover xd

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MrChooseup· Sep 27th

I usually like this artist's material, but this one just flopped for me. I think the atrocious dialogue at the beginning just destroys any immersion I might have had. A tip for artists translating into different languages; Google Translate is not your friend.

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Stretchxpert· Sep 26th

Totally agree.

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IriskaKiska· Sep 26th

It's an FF comic on yiff. Its an automatical 10/10 We need DRASTICALLY more of them.

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Stretchxpert· Sep 26th

This is yiff is short and sweet, 7/10 >:3

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Stretchxpert· Sep 26th

Yummi sesbian lex :O

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HalfyTheHound· Sep 26th

not bad 9/10 great quality -4 points for no Dicks

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The_Great_Pencil_One· Sep 26th

Thank you :D

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Shibanton_Ego· Sep 26th

@The_Great_Pencil_One it's objective and subjective, I just added the o' meter as in a thermOMETER

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The_Great_Pencil_One· Sep 26th

@Shibanton_Ego those words aren’t googleable, (yes I tried XD) so I need you to please be a scholar and define those. Rating: 2/10 storyline and dialogue, 7/10 art and storyline, 5/10 overall.

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Shibanton_Ego· Sep 26th

Objectivometer: art is ok, faces are a bit weird sometimes but the shading and proportions are still nice, no plot or context on why sex maybe cuz It's a wip, but I'm not sure so 5/10 Subjectivometer: I lowkey like cock so not my area, and no storyline so nothing to say -/-

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OwO· Sep 26th

Review - Not much to really say here. The art's good, but the dialogue and story are nonexistent. Nothing wrong with just straight-up sex, but I personally prefer a bit more meat to the story (not dicks, I mean like a more bulked-out story, you get what I'm saying). It's only six pages at the moment though, so I don't think it's really fair to give a rating yet.

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